Writing Slick Scene Descriptions

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Writing Slick Scene Descriptions

This is a great place to show off your voice, but never forget that screenplays are judged, in part, on their terseness and brevity.
How few words can you use to say something? Here is your mission, if you chose to accept it: show your wit, spark and creativity, but do so with great efficiency and economy of words.

First order of business: delete some verbs from your vocabulary—like “walk” and “talk”. Pretend they never existed; forget you once knew them. Why? They are bland and boring and they don’t tell us anything. Don’t believe me?

Here is what NOT to do:

Peter is tired and confused. He walks into the room and sits down on the couch while he talks to nobody in particular.

Bland and boring, right? How about this:

Peter slumps into the room, collapses on the couch and grouses under his breath.

More descriptive, less boring, fewer words. And we’ve substituted the more interesting and evocative “slumps” and “grouses” for “walks” and “talks.”

Another common mistake is to overdescribe environments. The reader doesn’t need the details of every piece of furniture in a room or every single item on a desk. We’ve all been inside churches, pizzerias, coffee shops, etc., so there’s no need to waste time describing these places unless there is something noteworthy or atypical about them.

Just give us a flavor: the ‘50s-inspired coffee shop, the hole-in-the-wall pizza joint that only sells slices; the church whose stained glass windows have seen better days. Comment on something that makes the scene unusual from what we expect. For example,

EXT. PIZZA JOINT – DAY

New York pizza by the slice. Going out of business sign in the window. 

Remember: brevity is the soul of wit.

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Frequently Asked Questions

1. What does AFM tell us about global film distribution trends?

AFM 2024 showed distributors favoring low-budget films with streaming platforms as dominant buyers. International distributors demonstrated caution, requiring strong commercial hooks and proven talent before committing to deals in today’s marketplace.

2. What are the hot genres right now?

Horror and action films dominated AFM 2024. Elevated horror, psychological thrillers, and modernized popcorn action are most sought-after. These genres succeed because they deliver audience appeal without requiring massive budgets or A-list stars.

3. What types of film budgets are currently being favored by independent distributors?

Independent distributors heavily favor films budgeted under thirty million dollars. Low-budget genre projects sell easiest. Mid-budget films struggle significantly unless featuring high-profile directors and major stars due to buyers’ extreme caution toward middle-tier investments.

4. How important is cast attachment when selling a film at AFM?

Cast attachment is critical, especially for streaming deals requiring A-list names. However, strong genre concepts can succeed with lesser-known talent. Mid-budget projects without recognizable stars face extremely difficult sales challenges today.

5. Why is it important for writers to be aware of the current marketplace?

Market awareness helps writers create commercially viable scripts that agents and managers can actually sell. Industry representatives need immediately sellable material in today’s economy, so understanding buyer preferences increases chances of getting read.